Saturday, February 2, 2013

Self Assessment Essay 1


1.       How would you tell the story of your thinking and writing process? Complete these sentences: “When I first began this assignment, I thought…..” and “AS I did some thinking, writing and research my ideas changed and I thought…”

I took lot of time watching the commercials over and over again.  I first tried to figure out what the rhetorical devices were, and how exactly they appealed and to who.  I finally figured this out, then took a couple of days to figure out how exactly I was going to start this.  Once I got it started it was ok. When I first began this assignment, I thought I would never get anywhere.  As I did some thinking, writing, and research my ideas changed and I thought slowly but surely I will do this. 

 

2.      How did you choose a text to analyze for this assignment?  What criteria did you use when selecting it?  I thought long and hard about what text to choose.  I didn’t have a clue where to even look.  Its kind of ironic, but my youngest son said he wanted some cereal to snack on.  Later on I thought…cereal, that it!  So I got on you tube searching for cereal commercials.  I ran across “Froot Loops.” I then search their commercials until I saw the Alien Fruit Monster.  I saw those and knew it was perfect.  With their being more than one commercial for this story line, and all of the details within I thought it was such a brilliant idea.  When my children saw what I was watching and asked to watch too, I showed them the commercials, and at the end they wanted a box, so I knew it was the text I had to analyze.

 

 

3.      What was the most difficult problem you faced while writing? How did you go about trying to solve it?  The most difficult problem I faced while writing was trying to figure out how I was going to truly analyze the rhetorical devices, and which one was I going to use first.  I didn’t know whether I had to use the words ethos, pathos, and logos, or just describe my opinion.  I struggled severely on the body of my paper.  I talked to Ms. Thomas about me struggling, and she said the way my thesis was written to just go in order I have the rhetorical devices written, and to explain each and how they were used.

 

 

4.      Whose advice did you seek while drafting, revising and editing? What advice did you take and what did you ignore? Why?  During the process to write my paper, I sought advice from Ms. Thomas, my mom, and of course the peer response.  I took into consideration everyone’s opinions.  Everyone pretty much told me the same thing about the order in which I needed to write the body of my paper.  I listened to everyone on that.  I revised my thesis like Ms. Thomas suggested as well as omitted some words, and added a few words throughout that was suggested from peer response.  After I went over my paper many times, I realized they were right and it sounded so much better revised. 

 

 

5.      What do you feel are the strongest points of this essay?  What are the weakest elements and how could you improve them?  I feel the strongest points in my essay are my introduction, and when I discuss the details and three-dimentional effects.  My weakest elements I think are of course my conclusion and describing more details of how the rhetorical devices affected what audience.  I am not confident with the way I described them.  In my conclusion I should have added a few more sentences to expand my final thought.  And Im going to be honest, I have no clue how I would improve on the rhetorical device explanation.  Maybe Im just not confident in it because I struggled so much.  

 

 

6.      What will you do differently on the next essay assignment?

On the next essay assignment, I will work on my conclusion and transitions.  I have always struggled with these, and I think I have gotten better.  But I still need to give it more thought in able to get the right words together.

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